5 Sentence Corrections

1.  Original sentence: Although meal plans are an easy way for students to access prepared food they are unnecessary and should be optional because many students do not use up all the money.
Problem: Run-on. Rule: Two independent clauses together with no punctuation between them.
Solution: Although meal plans are an easy way for students to access prepared food, they are unnecessary and should be optional because many students do not use up all the money
2.  Original sentence: Brigham Young University students living on campus are required to have a meal plan each semester they are living on campus.
Problem: Ineffective repetition. Rule: Words repeated unnecessarily whether exactly or in a different form should be avoided.
Solution: Brigham Young University students living in Helaman Halls are required to have a meal plan each semester they are living on campus.
3.  Original sentence: By letting students opt out of the meal plan or pay after they have spent the money they will learn how to manage this money and use it responsibly.
Problem: Run-on sentence. Rule: Two independent clauses together with no punctuation between them.
Solution: By letting students opt of the meal plan or pay after they have spent the money, they will learn how to manage this money and use it responsibly.
4.  Original sentence: Students can also use their meal cards to purchase food and groceries at the Brigham Young University creameries but it is just charged much like a credit card and students are not able to see the immediate effects of spending money.
Problem: Wordiness. Rule: Avoid expletive constructions, sentences in passive voice, and sentences built around weak verbs.
Solution: Students can also use their meal card to purchase food and groceries at the BYU creameries but it is charged similarly to a credit card so students are unable to see the immediate effects of their spending.
5.  Original sentence: If they are going to eat out at restaurants or campus eateries they should use cash or their own card so they have an understanding of what they are charging and how to manage their spending on food.
Problem: Too many words/run-on sentence. Rule: Two independent clauses together with no punctuation between them.
Solution: If they are going to eat out at restaurants, they should use their own means to pay so they have an understanding of how to manage their spending on food.